Our horse was haunted, afflicted with a doppelganger
said by the stable hand to portend death.
She could see the moon like an ornament on the dawn,
or the bulge of an apple in my coat pocket,
but not her double dipping its head as if weary from its own mimicry.
Aunt June said she has to see it, the way we saw owls in the barn rafters.
If she doesn't, it's just foxfire
the devil dancing on a rotten log.
She won't get moon eye from a dream.
All spring and into the summer the double stayed,
unfed, unbidden, inexplicable.
Rain on the roof sounded like snap beans.
Sun made the ground stream, ghosts rose, bewildered.
An old horse collar fell from its nail
though it never had before.
After that, we stopped seeing the double, and Aunt June said
that's the way of things, girl,
but it gave me a peculiar feeling,
like hearing a handsome boy tell a bald-faced lie.
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This gave me goosebumps! Wonderful, mysterious, and amazing! Your imagery is always powerful and eye opening my friend!! I love the cool direction the image took you! Stunning!!
ReplyDelete"Rain on the roof sounded like snap beans..." You are at the top of your form in this one, Shay.
ReplyDeleteThe ending sticks. I can chew on that like a stick of gum.
ReplyDeleteA goosebumpy tale! Great line: "She could see the moon like an ornament on the dawn"
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness! Too many incredible lines to quote but my fave is "her double dipping its head as if weary from its own mimicry." Wowzers! Fantastic!
ReplyDelete~ 'it's just foxfire the devil dancing on a rotten log' ~ brilliant how you used foxfire here. My grandmother often told us ghost stories .. one about ghosts in a barn that was falling apart, about how the ghosts were frightened away by the scary foxfire glow ... I still remember the story ... my sisters and I clamoring for more.
ReplyDeleteExquisitely written ... and that final line is perfection!
ReplyDeleteThis felt like a ghost story whispering itself over my shoulder. Leaves a shivery memory.
ReplyDeleteSo much ghostly mystery with details I can taste and chew on. Very cool. The owl in here has me wondering if you know the book "I Heard the Owl Call My Name" and the legend it refers to.
ReplyDeleteHorses get spooked easily. Their intuitive nature senses nature.. You have crafted
ReplyDeletea wonderfully haunting tale.
Ending is great. You managed to find dozens of amazing lines. Congrats on finding a way into WTF two blue horses.
ReplyDeleteClear and crisp images and unique phrasing. This is an eerie narrative and wonderfully done!
ReplyDeleteWow, Shay, I love that ending. It stays with you.
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