Reanimated Lavender Granola Switchblade Nun rides again.

Saturday, September 10, 2011

Allegro

8 stairs
To my door--
You said, 8 minutes, baby,
Not one more.

8 long kisses,
Fix your lips, and then--
8 letters in "I love you",
Then you're gone again.

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for A Word With Laurie

14 comments:

  1. Dreamy and romantic... love the 8 letters in "I love you"... thanks for participating.

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  2. 8 lines, too, along with a nice little rhyme scheme.

    Short and sweet, Shay.

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  3. I love it, Shay. Especially the 'fix your lips'--that adds at least 60 seconds to this quickie. ;_) Very creative and sharp take on a timed prompt.

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  4. Very nice!
    I love the line, "eight letters in I love you."
    X

    PS- I never thought about Spring being madness. Like a madness of growth and bursting. Hmmm... might have to include that in some writing somewhere. :)

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  5. lucky 8's Shay!



    Aloha from Waikiki;


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  6. In less than a minute, you have created a ruby-red gem here. This is such a witty response to the prompt!

    Thank you for sharing your work on Real Toads.

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  7. A lovely snippet - brilliant in one minute! I like the way you display the poem.

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  8. Whew, that was quick but very good ~

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  9. You remind us all how pleasing a quickie can be! ;)

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  10. amazing that you wrote this in a minute, Shay! LOVE it! ♥

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  11. Brilliant. This must be what is called "a New York minute". Tells a whole story, with such wit and economy. Fantastic writing! I didnt even try. It takes me a minute to defog my glasses, and defogging my brain is no longer possible. Hee hee.

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