Saturday, September 10, 2011

Allegro

8 stairs
To my door--
You said, 8 minutes, baby,
Not one more.

8 long kisses,
Fix your lips, and then--
8 letters in "I love you",
Then you're gone again.

_______

for A Word With Laurie

14 comments:

Laurie Kolp said...

Dreamy and romantic... love the 8 letters in "I love you"... thanks for participating.

Sioux said...

8 lines, too, along with a nice little rhyme scheme.

Short and sweet, Shay.

hedgewitch said...

I love it, Shay. Especially the 'fix your lips'--that adds at least 60 seconds to this quickie. ;_) Very creative and sharp take on a timed prompt.

Tabitha Bird said...

Very nice!
I love the line, "eight letters in I love you."
X

PS- I never thought about Spring being madness. Like a madness of growth and bursting. Hmmm... might have to include that in some writing somewhere. :)

Cloudia said...

lucky 8's Shay!



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Kerry O'Connor said...

In less than a minute, you have created a ruby-red gem here. This is such a witty response to the prompt!

Thank you for sharing your work on Real Toads.

vivinfrance said...

A lovely snippet - brilliant in one minute! I like the way you display the poem.

Doctor FTSE said...

Way the best. 'Nuff said!

Jinksy said...

Excellence times eight !

Heaven said...

Whew, that was quick but very good ~

Lolamouse said...

You remind us all how pleasing a quickie can be! ;)

Mama Zen said...

That's one hot minute!

haikulovesongs said...

amazing that you wrote this in a minute, Shay! LOVE it! ♥

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Brilliant. This must be what is called "a New York minute". Tells a whole story, with such wit and economy. Fantastic writing! I didnt even try. It takes me a minute to defog my glasses, and defogging my brain is no longer possible. Hee hee.