but it was no Up With People moment.
It hurt, so I worried at it
until it cracked and split.
From within,
a small dragon.
I fed her Poe and Rimbaud,
Ferlinghetti and Neko Case.
She grew and ate Detroit,
then was sick on the rug.
I led her on a chain,
her head searching side to side
and her haunches high.
Now she's Out, breathing fire.
Beautiful. Angry.
Loose.
_____
73 words for Words Count with Mama Zen at Real Toads
"She grew and ate Detroit,
ReplyDeletethen was sick on the rug."
You gotta know I zeroed in like a dart on bullseye.
Vivid, magnetic, raw. And 73 words. Powerful.
Oh my!
ReplyDeleteFabulous piece! Full of power and magic. i also loved the video you shared - reminded me of my little girl who has ridden elephants and ostriches (and camels).
ReplyDeleteWhat Kerry said. And I wish I wrote this poem. And thought of the animation. But mostly the poem. My dragon has been out and craves to be out again. Thank you for this gift.
ReplyDeleteI could not love this more!
ReplyDeleteI loved the last verse...especially "Beautiful. Angry. Loose."
ReplyDeleteIt's amazing what you can do with 73 words:~)
p.s.
I also like the video. The animation was great as was the song. I'm not familiar with Neko Case, but liked this song very much.
This is voodoo magic indeed! I love what happened here, Shay, catblossom! ♥
ReplyDeleteYou've put a lifetime into 73 words here, Shay--a smoky, black magic, backstreet gris-gris one. I like the lines LaTonya liked, but also the very opening and the end, which builds the dagger of this from hilt to point.
ReplyDeleteyikes! I see thousands of asian fleeing in panic!
ReplyDeleteGosh, it seemed like yesterday when Up With People replaced The New Christie Minstrells as America's "Feel Good" musical ensemble. (Sigh)
ReplyDeletePlease to feed Neko Case to the dragon, but not the rest!
ReplyDeletecool piece, dearie!
ReplyDeleteThis is great, Shay. Got a giggle out of "fed her Poe" which, much as I admire the man's ability, would be enough to make anyone eat Detroit.
ReplyDeleteHad to go to my backup browser in order to see the video and am glad I did. I'm reading a book by a former PR man for the San Diego Zoo.
Just noticed the Hemingway quote in your sidebar. So true. Ironic, as he says.
Luv, K
iPhone won't let me view the video. Will be back for that. A powerful lament... The dragon will get revenge, I'm sure of it.
ReplyDeleteLove it!! A dragon that eats Detroit...some dark magic and pain in this. Fantastic as always!
ReplyDelete"It was no Up With People moment." What a fantastic line! I love the dragon's head searching side to side, her haunches high. Wouldnt matter if you were only given FIVE words - you could make them reach farther than I can with a thousand.
ReplyDeleteCareful. An overload of Poe and Palahniuk can send one over the edge faster than you can say "disfigured supermodels"...
ReplyDeleteFeels like raw rage which I love to read! Great image. I so wish my computer worked to watch videos. I need techie help. Wonderful writing!
ReplyDeleteGosh!
ReplyDeletea wee gem!
ALOHA from Honolulu
Comfort Spiral
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"It was no 'Up With People' moment..." I'm still laughing.
ReplyDeleteCool song too!
ReplyDelete... Detroit will never be the same again. :-(
ReplyDeleteStrong, vivid, magical - as ever, Shay ~ M
ReplyDeleteI thought politicians already threw up Detroit!
ReplyDeleteShay, this was occult at its best... visceral, creepy, and kind of gross. In other words, BRILL! Amy
so happy you set her free! The wild must roam ;D Well Done
ReplyDeleteShay--Your "Up With People" reference brought back a flood of memories. I haven't thought about those sappy-happy singers in decades.
ReplyDeleteI loved the image of her head searching from side to side, the getting sick on the rug bit and yeah, I'm sure Mama Zen is a harsh task-mistress when it comes to word count...