Reanimated Lavender Granola Switchblade Nun rides again.

Wednesday, August 7, 2013

Opening My Heart

I opened my heart,
but it was no Up With People moment.
It hurt, so I worried at it
until it cracked and split.

From within,
a small dragon.
I fed her Poe and Rimbaud,
Ferlinghetti and Neko Case.

She grew and ate Detroit,
then was sick on the rug.
I led her on a chain,
her head searching side to side
and her haunches high.

Now she's Out, breathing fire.
Beautiful. Angry.
Loose.
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73 words for Words Count with Mama Zen at Real Toads


26 comments:

  1. "She grew and ate Detroit,
    then was sick on the rug."

    You gotta know I zeroed in like a dart on bullseye.

    Vivid, magnetic, raw. And 73 words. Powerful.

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  2. Fabulous piece! Full of power and magic. i also loved the video you shared - reminded me of my little girl who has ridden elephants and ostriches (and camels).

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  3. What Kerry said. And I wish I wrote this poem. And thought of the animation. But mostly the poem. My dragon has been out and craves to be out again. Thank you for this gift.

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  4. I loved the last verse...especially "Beautiful. Angry. Loose."

    It's amazing what you can do with 73 words:~)

    p.s.

    I also like the video. The animation was great as was the song. I'm not familiar with Neko Case, but liked this song very much.

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  5. This is voodoo magic indeed! I love what happened here, Shay, catblossom! ♥

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  6. You've put a lifetime into 73 words here, Shay--a smoky, black magic, backstreet gris-gris one. I like the lines LaTonya liked, but also the very opening and the end, which builds the dagger of this from hilt to point.

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  7. yikes! I see thousands of asian fleeing in panic!

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  8. Gosh, it seemed like yesterday when Up With People replaced The New Christie Minstrells as America's "Feel Good" musical ensemble. (Sigh)

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  9. Please to feed Neko Case to the dragon, but not the rest!

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  10. This is great, Shay. Got a giggle out of "fed her Poe" which, much as I admire the man's ability, would be enough to make anyone eat Detroit.
    Had to go to my backup browser in order to see the video and am glad I did. I'm reading a book by a former PR man for the San Diego Zoo.
    Just noticed the Hemingway quote in your sidebar. So true. Ironic, as he says.
    Luv, K

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  11. iPhone won't let me view the video. Will be back for that. A powerful lament... The dragon will get revenge, I'm sure of it.

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  12. Love it!! A dragon that eats Detroit...some dark magic and pain in this. Fantastic as always!

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  13. "It was no Up With People moment." What a fantastic line! I love the dragon's head searching side to side, her haunches high. Wouldnt matter if you were only given FIVE words - you could make them reach farther than I can with a thousand.

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  14. Careful. An overload of Poe and Palahniuk can send one over the edge faster than you can say "disfigured supermodels"...

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  15. Feels like raw rage which I love to read! Great image. I so wish my computer worked to watch videos. I need techie help. Wonderful writing!

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  16. Gosh!
    a wee gem!



    ALOHA from Honolulu
    Comfort Spiral
    ~ > < } } ( ° > <3

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  17. "It was no 'Up With People' moment..." I'm still laughing.

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  18. ... Detroit will never be the same again. :-(

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  19. Strong, vivid, magical - as ever, Shay ~ M

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  20. I thought politicians already threw up Detroit!

    Shay, this was occult at its best... visceral, creepy, and kind of gross. In other words, BRILL! Amy

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  21. so happy you set her free! The wild must roam ;D Well Done

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  22. Shay--Your "Up With People" reference brought back a flood of memories. I haven't thought about those sappy-happy singers in decades.

    I loved the image of her head searching from side to side, the getting sick on the rug bit and yeah, I'm sure Mama Zen is a harsh task-mistress when it comes to word count...

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