Reanimated Lavender Granola Switchblade Nun rides again.

Sunday, January 14, 2018

Hiding

I am hiding where you can't see
me, down where the roots find 
winding ways and secret water,
daughter of both silence and 
random lightning strike.

I am hiding where you can't touch,
such a stand-offish lonely sort
aboard a black-winged bird
absurd and glorious in her particular 
vernacular of singular songs and caws
jackdaws and crows
know better than a professor at his books.

I am hiding in the red detritus
I might as soon worship as any
many-strictured deity, and yet,
getting it wrong, being found out--
shouting and giving myself away,
saying yes, I really do reduce to
blues in the afternoon sung by
my own traitor voice on these pages like a kiss.
__________

for Fussy Little Forms: Chained Rhyme.

 

14 comments:

  1. I feel a search for a solitude in this, the image of those roots searching secret water sounds very much like reading books.... still it's not...
    anything with crows work with me.

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  2. i'll put up with your put-ons if you're willing to shout your own truth, and I see/hear you are:) And wearing red is not to be overlooked gf....you want to be found. you are brave. too noticeable to be overlooked. such a brilliant writer to be dumbed-down. my inspiration always.

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  3. You are a fountain of poetry.

    "aboard a black-winged bird
    absurd and glorious" YUP

    May I use the opening 5 lines as my epitaph?

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  4. "...aboard a black-winged bird...." Sigh. So lovely. I had to go back and read it again when I realized the form, just to admire how you inserted those rhyming words so stealthily, I didnt notice first time through. Wow.

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  5. I especially love these two lines: "daughter of both silence and
    random lightning strike."

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  6. You are on such a roll, Shay--this in particular is delicate, strong and musical and both lament and celebration--no matter how isolated one can be by one's individuality, one can't help knowing it for what it is: all we have, our singing heart.Too many exquisite rhymes here to count, and each thoughtful and telling. Not sure I agree with the premise of the singer being reduced in any way, though--there is so much more that goes into the making of this song than just the bitter knowledge of the blues.

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  7. Ohh! Perfect. This is how I like the chained rhyme... running on, enjambing, often barely discernible, so cool. Your poem, three sentences, I admire that too. Cool that you made a chained rhyme poem that so deeply resonates with your specific voice, and images that are purely Fireblossom. Good good!

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  8. I love this!
    The first stanza could be me, calm and (very) slow to anger - but on the odd time I lose it - watch out!
    A brilliant write Shay.
    Anna :o]

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  9. "absurd and glorious in her particular
    vernacular"

    That is poetry.

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  10. Hiding where we can't see but perhaps can feel? There is a delicate presence in this writing. The final stanza uncovers some painful but powerful truths.

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  11. This is nothing short of brilliant, Shay. Your rhymes are so intelligently rendered and never detract from the ideas and imagery. You are a master poet.

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  12. my words fail, in the light of yours, Shay. ~

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  13. A song both glorious and beautifully humble. Your poetry never disappoints Shay! .....and I have never seen the Jim Carey movie you were telling me about, but I do agree...we all can have signs almost hitting us in the head, but we don't always see them, or truly listen.

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