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Wednesday, January 22, 2014

Love Song for Connie Corleone

You made a fine and unforgettable bride,
but your husband...?
We won't be bothered with him anymore.

Beautiful as you were,
it is you, now, who captures my greater admiration.

I love your hair tied back headache tight,
the widows' weeds, and the jewelry
heavy as freight on a delivery truck.

What I love most is the flock in your eyes,
the murder of crows,
the steel of the guillotine behind your smile.

Let me be your command, darling,
already carried out.
________

for Real Toads. The theme is "eyes". I have exceeded the 75 word limit by 7 words, but it wasn't personal, only business!
 

26 comments:

  1. You sure know how to pick 'em! Thanks for reminding us to take a look into Connie's eyes to find the true source of Corleone muscle

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  2. as always, I do love your creativity and use of your paint brush. but, i think this time I got a 'kick' out of you defending going over the lines in the word count limits in your post script.

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  3. Brilliant subject, poem and song combo. I didn't laugh aloud til I played the song. Your perfect description of the "flock" in her eyes and her smile fit the willingness to serve and hit me in the gut.

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  4. I don't see any of those seven that I would make sleep with the fishes. Love that hair pulled back headache-tight(story of my childhood braids) and the eyes with a murder of crows, but the last line is the hit man here.

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  5. Nice. Pic poem song combo. What a great character three rows deep and still a stunner.

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  6. Such an accurate and forgiving sketch of a very powerful woman.

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  7. The third one was always such a disappointment but you reminded that connie was the bright spot and took over the spotlight in the end. Cool cool cool.

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  8. Hey, we're family. You go over the word count, I go over the word count, I scratch your back, you scratch mine. Kiss on both cheeks.

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  9. If these are your connections, take your 7, 8, 9, however many you like! No one messing with you!

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  10. "the flock in your eyes, the murder of crows".......so good!

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  11. 'hair tied back headache tight'...
    made me smile...

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  12. among compadres, 7, whatev'.

    but I'm counting. doncha forget. ~

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  13. "What I love most is the flock in your eyes,
    the murder of crows,
    the steel of the guillotine behind your smile."

    Love that...You always write with such strength..

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  14. The line about "the hair tied back headache tight" is perfecto.

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  15. Surrender can be so sexy. Great closing Lady Shay.

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  16. Love "the steel of guillotine behind your smile". Wow!

    Pat
    Critter Alley

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  17. Wow, wonderfully done. The comparisons are so strong. Thank you for posting.

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  18. controlled mastery



    ALOHA from Honolulu
    Comfort Spiral
    > < } } ( ° >

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  19. I'll agree that people age not only gracefully but beautifully as well. You've captured that opinion perfectly with this piece...

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  20. Without the song I would say that this is a 'coming out' poem.
    Going back to Naples? (An aside, I loved that song when it was on the Top 40.) I did that too, but not to Naples, in my 4th life. It lasted three years until Mrs. Jim found me. This 5th life has lasted 41 years now.
    ..

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  21. brava... hai catturato questo tema perfettamente

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  22. There's lots to love in this one, but I thought these words were wonderful, "I love your hair tied back headache tight." That's a great physical image.

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  23. Constanzia Corleone ~~ I remember how beautifully Talia Shire played her. Great poem, Shay.

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  24. "Let me be your command, darling,
    already carried out."

    one of the best lines EVER!

    {pleeeeeeease go back to work?}

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