A cat was running
Faster than a dog was chasing
Quicker than the earth was turning
And I was standing still
Round earth,
Orange cat,
Spotted dog,
Chasing through the early morning chill.
Five-pointed leaf
Four corners far
Three beating hearts
Two fading stars
A cat was watching
A dog's nose sniffing
The earth kept turning
And I was standing still.
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21 spoke through the ouija:
Holly....wow , full impact on the senses, I love it, Fb
This one just sings.
I seem to be standing still
a lot lately.
smiles. keep standing tall shay...this was an enjoyable piece...
the whole thing terrific with the first stanza my favorite!
I LOVE this one! It has critters in it - imagery is wonderful, I can see it all, round earth, orange cat, spotted dog - and the "I am standing still" really has impact, and makes me feel still, too. This is wonderful writing!
I think my vertigo's back...but I love this one, Chica! It has so much movement.
That totally creates a picture to be visualized. Even if I am not up that early!
It's when you stand still you notice everything around you...Loved this reverie.
Sweet and lovely.
And I like the poem too!!
xo
I love it. :-)
So much movement and yet so much stillness. Love how you turn paradox into poetry.
xo
Weasel-friend
I want to stand still and notice the movement around me :) Wonderful! Thank you xx
Three beating hearts. I loved this.
I know that feeling.
this is great - very catchy too...three beating hearts, two fading stars....dreamlike actually!
Another one I'd like to hear set to music. :)
This was so fresh and so pretty...
reminds me of those old books that had pictures that you flipped quickly to see the figures move - with one exception - the speaker is stationary
this is exceptional
Moonie Smiles
What gorgeous, perfect rhythm and structure!
My heart had a happy little romp with this one. Whee!
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