Saturday, October 16, 2010

Still



A cat was running

Faster than a dog was chasing

Quicker than the earth was turning

And I was standing still


Round earth,

Orange cat,

Spotted dog,

Chasing through the early morning chill.


Five-pointed leaf

Four corners far

Three beating hearts

Two fading stars


A cat was watching

A dog's nose sniffing

The earth kept turning

And I was standing still.


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21 comments:

Lorraine said...

Holly....wow , full impact on the senses, I love it, Fb

Cheryl said...

This one just sings.

faye said...

I seem to be standing still
a lot lately.

Brian Miller said...

smiles. keep standing tall shay...this was an enjoyable piece...

Caty said...

the whole thing terrific with the first stanza my favorite!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I LOVE this one! It has critters in it - imagery is wonderful, I can see it all, round earth, orange cat, spotted dog - and the "I am standing still" really has impact, and makes me feel still, too. This is wonderful writing!

Scarlet Ily said...

I think my vertigo's back...but I love this one, Chica! It has so much movement.

Riot Kitty said...

That totally creates a picture to be visualized. Even if I am not up that early!

Jinksy said...

It's when you stand still you notice everything around you...Loved this reverie.

Jannie Funster said...

Sweet and lovely.

And I like the poem too!!

xo

Susannah said...

I love it. :-)

La Belette Rouge said...

So much movement and yet so much stillness. Love how you turn paradox into poetry.
xo
Weasel-friend

Lisa said...

I want to stand still and notice the movement around me :) Wonderful! Thank you xx

Lynn said...

Three beating hearts. I loved this.

ellen abbott said...

I know that feeling.

Noelle said...

this is great - very catchy too...three beating hearts, two fading stars....dreamlike actually!

cinderkeys said...

Another one I'd like to hear set to music. :)

TALON said...

This was so fresh and so pretty...

moondustwriter said...

reminds me of those old books that had pictures that you flipped quickly to see the figures move - with one exception - the speaker is stationary

this is exceptional

Moonie Smiles

Mama Zen said...

What gorgeous, perfect rhythm and structure!

Lydia said...

My heart had a happy little romp with this one. Whee!