Sunday, September 23, 2012

Sevenling (Noble Steeds)

Time was, you loved my riding boots,
My jacket snug,
My crop;

Our busy lives have made that moot,
No time for bridle or bit--
Our noble steeds reduced in needs,

Just eat and quarrel and shit.
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Photograph taken by the fiercely talented Mama Zen

for Real Toads mini-challenge: sevenlings. 

23 comments:

Kerry O'Connor said...

I knew you would choose this picture! And how well you have factored in the human element. You have such a wise and knowing way of opening up our relationships for scrutiny, and do not hesitate to include a sting.

This is great.

Sioux said...

Sharp and true. That last line was such a wonderful contrast to the lines about the boots and jacket and crop. (WTF is in your coffee this morning? ;)

ellen abbott said...

how easily the good parts slip away.

hedgewitch said...

You manage to pack a world of innuendo and inference and mood into these few lines, which of course, is the point of this form..I love especially the 'jacket snug.' And the last line, totally agree--fertile ground neglected often produces the most noxious weeds.

TexWisGirl said...

this made me laugh. :)

Mama Zen said...

You are such a hopeless romantic!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Love Mama Zen's comment. You say more in seven lines than many do in seventy.

Susie Clevenger said...

I love this! Life can be so mundane. You had me giggling.

Grace said...

That last line made me smile ...he..he...

Cloudia said...

Life! Summarily DISSED!
Thanks for your touching comment about a certain fur friend.

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HermanTurnip said...

Subtle, bleak, and to the point. Much like the majority of my life. Unsure if I should laugh or cry.

Margaret said...

Riding breeches might help turn a head? ha ha. This is such a sharp poem! I'm in awe.

amidemanila said...

Very wise indeed...

Lynn said...

Hmmmm....

Mary said...

All right then!! (LOL)

The last line says so much....it has all come down to that.

Far Beyond The Ridge said...

Nah ah! Nope, you're wrong
I'll never tire of that jacket, those boots, the swish of the crop.
Can't get that busy
What are the horses for?
~rick

Hannah said...

OH MY WORD!! Shay!! I love what you did here...so freakin' true...so many forget that life is meant to enjoy and fall into routine, mundane and lackluster. Well done woman!

Other Mary said...

So much truth and so much innuendo in this! Wow!

Lolamouse said...

And that's when things are going well!

Marian said...

i LOVE the rhymes.

Helen said...

These folks need a little get-away!!

Susan said...

Sad beneath the broad laugh, but I trust that this is not true. If true, only temporary. And if temporary, no harm came to actual animals.

hoofprintsinmygarden said...

Perfect! That last line is awesome -- you can take it at face value with the horses or take it much, much further. Love it!