My jacket snug,
My crop;
Our busy lives have made that moot,
No time for bridle or bit--
Our noble steeds reduced in needs,
Just eat and quarrel and shit.
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Photograph taken by the fiercely talented Mama Zen
for Real Toads mini-challenge: sevenlings.
I knew you would choose this picture! And how well you have factored in the human element. You have such a wise and knowing way of opening up our relationships for scrutiny, and do not hesitate to include a sting.
ReplyDeleteThis is great.
Sharp and true. That last line was such a wonderful contrast to the lines about the boots and jacket and crop. (WTF is in your coffee this morning? ;)
ReplyDeletehow easily the good parts slip away.
ReplyDeleteYou manage to pack a world of innuendo and inference and mood into these few lines, which of course, is the point of this form..I love especially the 'jacket snug.' And the last line, totally agree--fertile ground neglected often produces the most noxious weeds.
ReplyDeletethis made me laugh. :)
ReplyDeleteYou are such a hopeless romantic!
ReplyDeleteLove Mama Zen's comment. You say more in seven lines than many do in seventy.
ReplyDeleteI love this! Life can be so mundane. You had me giggling.
ReplyDeleteThat last line made me smile ...he..he...
ReplyDeleteLife! Summarily DISSED!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your touching comment about a certain fur friend.
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Subtle, bleak, and to the point. Much like the majority of my life. Unsure if I should laugh or cry.
ReplyDeleteRiding breeches might help turn a head? ha ha. This is such a sharp poem! I'm in awe.
ReplyDeleteVery wise indeed...
ReplyDeleteHmmmm....
ReplyDeleteAll right then!! (LOL)
ReplyDeleteThe last line says so much....it has all come down to that.
Nah ah! Nope, you're wrong
ReplyDeleteI'll never tire of that jacket, those boots, the swish of the crop.
Can't get that busy
What are the horses for?
~rick
OH MY WORD!! Shay!! I love what you did here...so freakin' true...so many forget that life is meant to enjoy and fall into routine, mundane and lackluster. Well done woman!
ReplyDeleteSo much truth and so much innuendo in this! Wow!
ReplyDeleteAnd that's when things are going well!
ReplyDeletei LOVE the rhymes.
ReplyDeleteThese folks need a little get-away!!
ReplyDeleteSad beneath the broad laugh, but I trust that this is not true. If true, only temporary. And if temporary, no harm came to actual animals.
ReplyDeletePerfect! That last line is awesome -- you can take it at face value with the horses or take it much, much further. Love it!
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