Monday, September 10, 2012

Thoughts From A Walk In The Blue Dawn

I received a letter from my own near future,
and it said
oh,
girl,
oh.

I made a poem upon a window pane,
but I drew it
slow
so
slow.

Hurry Autumn, hurry love--
I so seldom feel beautiful at all;
I've no idea what I've been thinking of,
or who that is that
calls
and 
calls.
_____

16 comments:

Sioux said...

Yeah, right...another one for the landfill? YOU are full of crap, but your work is not.

The bit of repetition at the end of each stanza, and the bit of wistfulness? A plaintive plea? Not sure, but I did so (oh, girl) did enjoy it.

hedgewitch said...

Something of that early early dawn feeling here, before the sun comes and shines uncompromising and bright, when the heart can still find a crack or two to slip its message to us...a forlorn edge, but also a certain lilt that says dawn is a time of beginnings even if autumn is a precursor of endings. The refrain lines are lullaby simple, and doubly effective that way.

HermanTurnip said...

It's the simple ones that really capture my attention. Very nice!

myheartslovesongs.com said...

oooooooh! i loooooove this one!

FABulous opening line!

Lynn said...

A letter from my own future - oh how I wish.

Daryl said...

its summer saying dont go ....

Mama Zen said...

There is something about this that really moves me.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Yes, this is what I call tattoo poetry - words so exquisitely put together I would hate for them to ever be erased.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Yes, this wistfulness is so poignant - oh, girl, oh!

Susan said...

oh
slow
calls
If I were walking the same dawn with a dew window poem, would I "hurry autumn, hurry love"? Probably, to stand instead of drifting when I call.
I love your poem.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Hurry Autumn, indeed. Very beautiful words here.

Mary Jane Bane said...

*sigh* your poems leave me breathless.

Cloudia said...

So slow am I - Hurry!

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Shadow said...

dreamy... and, erm, shay, all ya gotta do is pick up the phone *grin*

Helen said...

Landfill ... landslide ... it's all good.

Lydia said...

This is definitely not for the landfill, silly!