Reanimated Lavender Granola Switchblade Nun rides again.

Monday, September 10, 2012

Thoughts From A Walk In The Blue Dawn

I received a letter from my own near future,
and it said
oh,
girl,
oh.

I made a poem upon a window pane,
but I drew it
slow
so
slow.

Hurry Autumn, hurry love--
I so seldom feel beautiful at all;
I've no idea what I've been thinking of,
or who that is that
calls
and 
calls.
_____

16 comments:

  1. Yeah, right...another one for the landfill? YOU are full of crap, but your work is not.

    The bit of repetition at the end of each stanza, and the bit of wistfulness? A plaintive plea? Not sure, but I did so (oh, girl) did enjoy it.

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  2. Something of that early early dawn feeling here, before the sun comes and shines uncompromising and bright, when the heart can still find a crack or two to slip its message to us...a forlorn edge, but also a certain lilt that says dawn is a time of beginnings even if autumn is a precursor of endings. The refrain lines are lullaby simple, and doubly effective that way.

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  3. It's the simple ones that really capture my attention. Very nice!

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  4. oooooooh! i loooooove this one!

    FABulous opening line!

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  5. A letter from my own future - oh how I wish.

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  6. There is something about this that really moves me.

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  7. Yes, this is what I call tattoo poetry - words so exquisitely put together I would hate for them to ever be erased.

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  8. Yes, this wistfulness is so poignant - oh, girl, oh!

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  9. oh
    slow
    calls
    If I were walking the same dawn with a dew window poem, would I "hurry autumn, hurry love"? Probably, to stand instead of drifting when I call.
    I love your poem.

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  10. Hurry Autumn, indeed. Very beautiful words here.

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  11. *sigh* your poems leave me breathless.

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  12. So slow am I - Hurry!

    Aloha from Honolulu
    Comfort Spiral
    =^..^=

    > < } } ( ° >

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  13. dreamy... and, erm, shay, all ya gotta do is pick up the phone *grin*

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  14. Landfill ... landslide ... it's all good.

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  15. This is definitely not for the landfill, silly!

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