Wednesday, January 22, 2014

Love Song for Connie Corleone

You made a fine and unforgettable bride,
but your husband...?
We won't be bothered with him anymore.

Beautiful as you were,
it is you, now, who captures my greater admiration.

I love your hair tied back headache tight,
the widows' weeds, and the jewelry
heavy as freight on a delivery truck.

What I love most is the flock in your eyes,
the murder of crows,
the steel of the guillotine behind your smile.

Let me be your command, darling,
already carried out.
________

for Real Toads. The theme is "eyes". I have exceeded the 75 word limit by 7 words, but it wasn't personal, only business!
 

26 comments:

blueoran said...

You sure know how to pick 'em! Thanks for reminding us to take a look into Connie's eyes to find the true source of Corleone muscle

Marcoantonio Arellano said...

as always, I do love your creativity and use of your paint brush. but, i think this time I got a 'kick' out of you defending going over the lines in the word count limits in your post script.

Susan said...

Brilliant subject, poem and song combo. I didn't laugh aloud til I played the song. Your perfect description of the "flock" in her eyes and her smile fit the willingness to serve and hit me in the gut.

hedgewitch said...

I don't see any of those seven that I would make sleep with the fishes. Love that hair pulled back headache-tight(story of my childhood braids) and the eyes with a murder of crows, but the last line is the hit man here.

Sam Edge Author said...

Nice. Pic poem song combo. What a great character three rows deep and still a stunner.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Such an accurate and forgiving sketch of a very powerful woman.

Sam Edge Author said...

The third one was always such a disappointment but you reminded that connie was the bright spot and took over the spotlight in the end. Cool cool cool.

Lolamouse said...

Hey, we're family. You go over the word count, I go over the word count, I scratch your back, you scratch mine. Kiss on both cheeks.

Robyn Greenhouse said...

If these are your connections, take your 7, 8, 9, however many you like! No one messing with you!

TexWisGirl said...

she's a grim one!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

"the flock in your eyes, the murder of crows".......so good!

Sumana Roy said...

'hair tied back headache tight'...
made me smile...

grapeling said...

among compadres, 7, whatev'.

but I'm counting. doncha forget. ~

Susie Clevenger said...

"What I love most is the flock in your eyes,
the murder of crows,
the steel of the guillotine behind your smile."

Love that...You always write with such strength..

Sioux said...

The line about "the hair tied back headache tight" is perfecto.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Surrender can be so sexy. Great closing Lady Shay.

K9friend said...

Love "the steel of guillotine behind your smile". Wow!

Pat
Critter Alley

Peggy said...

Wow, wonderfully done. The comparisons are so strong. Thank you for posting.

Cloudia said...

controlled mastery



ALOHA from Honolulu
Comfort Spiral
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HermanTurnip said...

I'll agree that people age not only gracefully but beautifully as well. You've captured that opinion perfectly with this piece...

Jim said...

Without the song I would say that this is a 'coming out' poem.
Going back to Naples? (An aside, I loved that song when it was on the Top 40.) I did that too, but not to Naples, in my 4th life. It lasted three years until Mrs. Jim found me. This 5th life has lasted 41 years now.
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Daryl said...

brava... hai catturato questo tema perfettamente

Sara said...

There's lots to love in this one, but I thought these words were wonderful, "I love your hair tied back headache tight." That's a great physical image.

Helen said...

Constanzia Corleone ~~ I remember how beautifully Talia Shire played her. Great poem, Shay.

myheartslovesongs.com said...

"Let me be your command, darling,
already carried out."

one of the best lines EVER!

{pleeeeeeease go back to work?}

Mama Zen said...

I wish that I had written this!