Monday, September 24, 2012

The Old Angel

The Old Angel
shakes bits of September from her wings
and stands at the gates of the prison from which she
has just been paroled.

The clerk had said,
"Here's your harp,"
but the Old Angel told her to pitch it.
She took her big drug store sunglasses,
her mood ring,
and allowed herself to be escorted outside, though she could have flown.

Where did the 90's go?
And the decade after that?
She wants to talk to God,
but there are no pay phones.

Stopping in front of a store window, she sighs.
"Look at me,
I am nothing but dry skin and split ends."
She almost cries.

The Old Angel is like any other angel--
She would like to be pretty,
would like someone's face to light up and for them to say,
"Well look at you."
She would like to have angel babies
and a garden.

Oh well.

The Old Angel is out on parole.
She sits down on a dirty bench and talks to the pigeons,
her fellow winged creatures.
"I was innocent, I tell ya."
They coo.
Bless them.

On she goes, into a little coffee shop called Danny's.
The waitress watches her walk in and she tilts her head.
"Well look at you," she says,
just as if she knew her well,
just as if they were old friends
and she had been waiting.


aprille said...

Well, Fireblossom, what have you done here? Created a wonderful start to a novel.
We will all want to know more. Promise you will write a sequel, at least.
300 pages would be better :-)

Lolamouse said...

A new character for Danny's? I'm excited! Does she need to be a fallen angel to get in with the crowd there?

Mary said...

Everyone needs a Danny's in their life, a place where they KNOW they will be seen! Loved the 'old angel.' Yup, no more phone booths; and the old angel probably didn't own a cellphone.

Shadow said...

A new character, I hope? My story-weaving friend.

Daryl said...

ah, see she's found the right place to go .. Danny's!!!!

Far Beyond The Ridge said...

That's why i love your writing, shay
It's always creative, inventive, and imaginative.
Never know what you're gonna get, but you know it will be special.

ellen abbott said...

yes, I want to know more. and of course she would be expected at Danny's.

TexWisGirl said...

so glad you ended it with an uplift. us old angels need a boost...

Kerry O'Connor said...

Last week it was mad women in the swamp, and today an angel on parole.. Sheesh! I wish I had.... you know.

You have the uncanny knack of creating a character that your readers can immediately buy into, we champion her, and welcome her home.

hedgewitch said...

I could feel the heaviness of life, the sheer weight of years in the opening stanzas, pressing the heart to a fine powder--but suddenly, she's talking to pigeons, and everything is looking up. Of course she's innocent, and of course, she ends up at Danny's--so perfect Shay.

Abin Chakraborty said...

bewitching read. especially love the idea of a payphone to god! great.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I LOVE the Old Angel, and so love it that the waitress at Danny's said "Well, look at you." The Old Angel is immediately one of my favorite characters, Shay. You write human hearts so very well.

Herotomost said...

Wierdly this so relates to my life at the moment. Wont get into how...but you couldn't have created a more timely or magnificent write. Your characters are always so good, regardless the lenght of the work. Press on.

Hannah said...

To be really, really seen...adored...a precious commodity these affections. Nicely penned indeed, Shay.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...


Cloudia said...

so lovely and moving. Too good for the 'experts' I suppose, but I don't need them to know what's GREAT!

YOU are, Shay.

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Sioux said...

I'm ASSuming this is part one, and there are several more in this series. Right?

Marian said...

love it. but then again, i'm just flyaway split ends and dry skin. more, please!

Joanna Jenkins said...

What a great start to a new chapter and character. More please, pretty please???
xo jj

HermanTurnip said...

Loved the Danny's cameo. Great to see that your characters have a place to hang out where somebody knows their names...

Ella said...

I want a payphone to God?!
Great musings...give us more ;D

Susie Clevenger said...

Everyone needs a Danny's...great beginning to what I hope will be more chapters to come.

Robyn Greenhouse said...

So curious the story behind the jail time and what's to come!

Margaret said...

Pigeons instead of doves. Danny's instead of a church. There is something for everyone :)

Mama Zen said...

More! More!

Anonymous said...

yes, more please!!!!

Anonymous said...

yes, more please!!!!

shawnacy said...

well, look at you.
... sheesh, if we could really do that... see each other.
Danny's is a magic place.
and that old angel is a familiar face.
beautiful, shay.