First of all, I've cheated. I found the photo prompt at One Shoot Sunday too tame, and so I've switched it out for one I like better. As Cyndi Lauper sang, ain't no law against it yet.
Now then. Even a girl not properly respectful of photo prompts must respect her betters, and my favorite poetess in the cyber world, Hedgewitch, has introduced me to the sestina. Here is mine.
DANCE OF THE BLACKBIRD
Because of desire, I so loved the rain
I slipped out of my body to float in the air
With an ancient prayer, I slipped my skin
Dismissing virtue, dismissing sin
I kissed the storm and joined it there
Incorporeal, a dreamer insane
To those who would live in a body of air
To those who would touch the storm on its skin
If light is love, if darkness is sin
What of the ones who mix them there?
To those who call the serene insane
Slip out of your skins, slip into the rain
What I love best is smooth olive skin
By candle light, inviting sin
Dark hair like dark weather spreading there
To make me shake with desire insane
As ice is to steam, as steam is to rain
You are to me as flesh is to air
Proscriptions are boring, so is sin
What's gone comes back, what's vanished is there
In my sleep like sighs, like a night insane
To fall like an angel, wrapped in rain
To rise like spirit when kissed by air
Without constraint, nor bone, nor skin
A wail of wind, a strike just there
What began in calm, arrives insane
In driving need and driving rain
Heat rising into cooler air
A shade obsessed with pulse and skin
Twists holy love with edgy sin
Desire in the bones is desire insane
As love of you is love of the rain
To find you, I've turned my body to air
To touch you, I've brought the sky to your skin
My mind to fever, my heart to sin
A floundering bird in the storm's heart, there
I've so loved the rain that so loves your skin
Carried by clouds to salvation and sin
Did you even, ever, know I was there?
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Oh Shay, you just pierce me over and over.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing as always. "A shade obsessed with pulse and skin / Twists holy love with edgy sin" Love it! Have a grab ass, I mean kick ass weekend ;)
ReplyDeleteGorgeous!
ReplyDeleteha - cheating...!! but i have to admit... i really like this....smiles
ReplyDeleteha. way to kick it up a notch shay...and not just the pic...i dunno, love passion can dance close to that edge between heaven and hell....
ReplyDeleteIt's all here -- passion, sensuality, the uncaring openness of "desire insane." Just like that photo. Well done.
ReplyDelete"A wail of wind, a strike just there
ReplyDeleteWhat began in calm, arrives insane"
I liked the lines imp-articular but above all, I enjoyed your whole poem
Lol Shay hot hot hot! Great word play!
ReplyDeleteFANTASTIC CHEATING Shay..ha ha..;) i have to agree with you..this picture is more passionate..ALONG with your GORGEOUS lines, you just made me spin on my toes, now expecting Rain at any minute..:))
ReplyDeleteDark and beautiful, full of compressed images and tension, lyrical and delicate--I like it very much..I'd pick out these lines "..Proscriptions are boring, so is sin /What's gone comes back, what's vanished is there..' but they're just two among many. You've definitely redefined the boringness of weather as a topic.
ReplyDeleteNice warm and cozy, steamy and wet poem.
ReplyDeleteWow - gorgeous, as always.
ReplyDeletelove the rhyme Shay and the passion know of olive skin...great writing...bkm
ReplyDeleteThis left me breathless! I feel as though I flew through the storm as the blackbird. {My favorite bird and the one I write about most often.} Really stunning!
ReplyDeleteHoly shit, Shay...this is completely insane :)
ReplyDelete"To find you, I've turned my body to air" ~ wow, just wow
"to fall like an angel, wrapped in rain". Stunning poem, so flowing and erotic and full of wondrous lines and images and brilliancies. Poems dont get much better than this!
ReplyDeleteAnd the last line is heartbreaking, Shay...
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem.
Dear Tiger-friend, I mean this as a compliment, I say this up front as not everyone would think this is a compliment---but it IS. This poem made me think of that brilliant Calvin Klein commercial, I think it was for Eternity. You remember that line, "I don't know where you stop and I start, CK Eternity." I thought there was a brilliant wisdom to that add. Love, when it is transcendent, breaks down boundaries and does allow us to expand boundaries and leave our skin and enter another's. You capture this MUCH better than the people who write copy for CK.
ReplyDeletexo
Your Weasel-friend
sold! body, mind and soul...
ReplyDeleteA sestina, huh? Glorious. I will forever be in love with the form having been introduced to it via this one by you. omg
ReplyDeleteOh, SO beautiful. You've inspired me to try my hand at the sestina form. Wow.
ReplyDelete"Dark hair like dark weather spreading there."
ReplyDeleteThat's gorgeous.
This so beautiful, Shay! I love the darkness, the sensuality, the longing.
ReplyDeleteThere are so many amazing lines and images in this one, but here are my favorites: "Desire in the bones is desire insane/As love of you is love of the rain" Mmmm..."Desire in the bones"...so feel that one.
This makes me want to scribble some poetry! So, thanks for the inspiration!
a sestina, so bold! that's a challenge.
ReplyDeletethe last line says it all.
well done.