Reanimated Lavender Granola Switchblade Nun rides again.
Tuesday, January 4, 2011
Disasters Elsewhere
What is more dull than other people's lovers?
And what is less compelling
Than disasters elsewhere
And the people who wring their hands over them?
What matters is
My coffee isn't right
And you have not kissed me
In more than ten hours.
I am a dry leaf.
Shall I shade you?
I need all the world's rain for myself--
Get out of here,
And take with you all the places I never go.
Once,
I was a messenger of divine kindness.
I taped together wounded butterflies,
And even watched your damn kids.
Now,
I have someone else do my dancing, though badly,
And I steal songs from the throats of yellow birds
To stuff into my stiff black shoes
Lest they lose their shape.
Someone else's lover came knocking at my door
With an earthquake in his hands.
People fell from him.
My steps shivered and cracked.
You know,
This coffee just isn't right
And you have not kissed me
In more than ten years,
But you hang all over that bastard at the door.
Did you get sick of women?
Or was it because my brown autumn eyes
Left you in famine,
So you sought out the flood?
_________
a little portrait of the butch from hell, for One Shot Wednesday
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The beginning of this poem is insightful above and beyond your normal insightfulness, and it only gets better. "..Get out of here,/And take with you all the places I never go." --a line that sums up an entire relationship, and possibly the world. Many aces here, and the last two stanzas hit the human buttons perfectly. I can almost see them, under the dry leaves.
ReplyDeleteI love the ones where i never want to stop reading.
ReplyDeleteEspecially liked
"And take with you all the places I never go."
Thanks so much for sharing.
*Note to self: Buy a printer.
ReplyDeleteI might become one of those people who have to tape things to walls.
I F@$#'ing love this!
Damn!!! you are SOOOO fREAKING AMAZING Shay..yes, i told u before! i lOVE READING YOU..TOO GOOD! :))))))))))
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this!
ReplyDeletewell written. kept me interested right to the very last line
thank you
i hate it when the coffee is not right...and dang 10 years no kisses....not good at all shay...10 hours would be a stretch...10 minutes..ok, a bit much...smiles
ReplyDeleteit's about damn time you woke up and tasted the coffee :)
ReplyDeleteand I hate instant because it tastes real good at first but then the aftertaste lets you know somethin' ain't right.
don't kid yourself neither.
it ain't right.
The images you conjure are arresting. I had to stop and watch them with my mind's eye for a moment or two.
ReplyDeleteThat's right, it's all about ME and what's right/wrong in MY world. ;)
ReplyDeleteLove this one!!!
You do it every time with so much ease.
ReplyDeleteShay, this is my favorite of anything of yours I've read. I just love it. You are woman. I hear you roar.
ReplyDeleteYou got style F.B.
ReplyDeleteHoly Mackerel. Fan-fricking-tastic!
ReplyDeleteI hate to see this poem end. Such a wonderful opening two stanzas. Great!
ReplyDeleteTeresa
Wow - this is so intense. And I appreciate that line "the coffee isn't right" - I get that.
ReplyDeleteWow, this is nice. Hits a little too close to home for comfort, though. Good job.
ReplyDeleteCoffee is never right. Give me a cup, and it will be left.
ReplyDeleteYou take us from a jaded, disinterested world view to a passionate personal and world reality on your doorstep. Great and powerful writing culminating in that last set of lines. Excellent write. You're always a favorite read for me! Gay @beachanny
ReplyDeleteThe section about divine kindness is . . . well, pure Shay. Fucking brilliant.
ReplyDeleteThis fabulous. I was pulled all the way in.
ReplyDeleteRichly layered, a feast for the senses, most vivid penning...
ReplyDeleteyou describe it so well, I can see it.
ReplyDeleteYou grabbed me in at the beginning and left me wanting more. Awesome write.
ReplyDeleteOh to humans waking...I know it's a far reach and as a whole near impossible but like you I can hope a miracle happens.
You truly are an amazing poet. when will there be a book of Shay for me to buy?
ReplyDeleteHappy New Year.
rather kiss me or get the coffee right any day rather than show me the earthquake!
ReplyDeleteSomeone else's lover came knocking...
ReplyDeleteyes he will come take what he wants and walk away!
Strong piece Shay
hot coffee in the face - an option
Moonie smiles
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ReplyDeletegift....you have, you offer, you are...a gift.
ReplyDeleteButterflies, leaves, eyes, lovers and bad coffee- and I love the throats of yellow birds...Someone else's lover
ReplyDeletecame, hmmm. Really puts a new slant on
things. We do turn corners unexpectedly
and it often helps overall understanding!
Thanks.
feeling a little bitter today?
ReplyDeleteThe heart questions...the soul knows...
ReplyDeleteYou certainly know how to sharpen your words so they penetrate. I feel the anger here, but I also detect an underlying sadness hidden beneath all the brash words.
ReplyDeleteSome day you will find your new kiss, Shay. I know you will.
The selfish, honest anger of your words strikes a chord. I love these lines in particular:
ReplyDelete"And I steal songs from the throats of yellow birds
To stuff into my stiff black shoes
Lest they lose their shape."
Poor birds. Poor you.
I love this... it's so poetic but yet almost a conversation... well done.
ReplyDeleteJim Bronyaur
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I liked the build up...the start, the middle and the ending...spectacular!!
ReplyDeleteHere is my One Shot:
musical whirlwind
I love the taping together of wounded butterflies.....and the stealong of songs from the throats of yellow birds. If I could write and imagine ONE poem like this, I would we so happy, and you do one every single day. Brilliantly.
ReplyDeleteWow! Amazing linguistic criss-cross journey, and the honesty. I love it!
ReplyDeleteSo much to read into in this, love the imagery and style. I wonder if everyone reading has let their own demons influence their interpretations?
ReplyDeleteYour work is so delicious-- you don't hold back and you take risks and you love language. so: you are quite the poet, my dear! xxxxj btw revised my Fabulosa poem. think about joining us at She Writes-- I moderate Poets on She Writes--xxxjen
ReplyDeleteNice write - I love your use of vernacular imagery
ReplyDeleteI am a dry leaf.
ReplyDeleteShall I shade you?
I need all the world's rain for myself--
Get out of here,
And take with you all the places I never go.
Sigh.
i thoroughly enjoyed the read..and then the venom of the piece came in right on cue.....i understood every word you conveyed but as a man...i will meekly shy away.....great poem...pete
ReplyDelete..I taped together wounded butterflies.. you always have the most breath-taking imagery..tight write!
ReplyDeleteShay, An absolute wonderful read. I loved the imagery and felt the pain. As always a great addition to One Shot. Thank you for sharing such a heart wrenching experience.
ReplyDeleteExcellently rendered bitter (with able end pseudo-twists) work. Great finish.
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