Monday, January 17, 2011

Questions And Answers, Once Upon A Time



Carrying my heart between my lungs in a bag of broken glass

So I wear a thousand overcoats

And can't feel it when they ask



What are you going to do about...?

Why do you...?

What makes you think that we...?

You always...

You never...



The best thing about a bottle is it has a mouth but never talks

So I take it off alone some place

And we kiss til I can't walk



Do you care about ____ at all?

Is anything more important to you than...?

How long do you think you can...?

You'll only wind up dead...



Please shut up and let me pass out here

On the shards so pretty and red.

_______

24 comments:

Helen said...

Perfect pairing ~ image and words.

hedgewitch said...

Love the contrast between the neat rhymed stanzas and the formless, prodding, annoying questions with no right answers...middle rhyme is my fave---sometimes stopping all the talk is best, however you get there.

Jannie Funster said...

Okay, it's official. You are not from this planet. Mere Earth People cannot string such words in succession.

WOW~

xoxo

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

no...you shut up :)

this is so annoyingly wonderful

Lynn said...

Shielding feelings with a thousand overcoats. Wow - that is wonderful imagery.

mac said...

That bottle used to be my friend. The fucker caused me nothing but trouble.

Well, we all wind up dead.
I passed the time where I could have left a pretty corpse long ago ;-)


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Tabitha Bird said...

The bottle with the mouth that kisses and never talks, yea. I know her well. she wanted me for herself, but I told her no. There were things I wanted to say and people I wanted to say them to. She couldn't have me. Not then. Not today.

Your poetry rocks. you know that, right?

Neva Flores said...

and we kiss til I can't walk......wow! Excellent poem!

Hannah Stephenson said...

"Please shut up" is quite fun...

One suggestion for you--would you consider cutting the first line, "It's like"? Then it would begin with "Carrying your heart" which is a really strong opening. Just something to consider, perhaps...

Fireblossom said...

Right you are, Hannah. Done. :-)

Mama Zen said...

We all wind up dead, do we not?

Until then . . . unicorns!

Sioux Roslawski said...

I loved the three middle lines the best as well. However, the whole piece--as usual--is brilliant.

Why haven't you published these pieces in an anthology? They're wicked good.

Lulú said...

That particular mouth is sweet but deadly...if kissed too often. I get it and I love it...the poetry, that is.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Talk about a "hook" to end all hooks, your opening lines just grab the reader.......carrying your heart in a bag of broken glass........and the thousand overcoats?????? oh my god!!!!!
Fantastic and powerful poem, important topic.

Kay said...

to have a mouth, but do not speak... love your bottle friend...

wouldn't it just be easier to be stupid?

To have a brain, but not to think???

mmm hmmm... that would be oddly refreshing actually....

Shadow said...

too many questions.... let me breathe!!!!!

Brian Miller said...

fark this is hot shay...your opening grabs us...then the kisses...i am swooning...keep questioning...

TALON said...

Ouch...this one cuts, Shay.

moondustwriter said...

Shay
If the overcoats could insulate we would
Well maybe not ...
We put up with the shards

Knowing smile from the moon

Cloudia said...

"Carried by clouds"

Thanks!


Aloha from Waikiki

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Steve Isaak said...

Great images and effective notions - exemplary.

Ami Mattison said...

Um...ow! This one hurts so good. I loved that damn bottle once too, but I decided I liked walking too much to keep kissing it.

Your opening is perfect. And a "thousand overcoats"...get outta here; it's soooo good!

Totally feeling this. Thanks for sharing!

Senorita said...

Beautiful poem, and lovely photo to match !

Caty said...

stopped in for a visit; haven't been around much. this made my day; I loved this piece, the first stanza and the line "has a mouth but does not speak" are absolutely perfect