Monday, December 26, 2011

When I Think Of You, It Brings These Lines

by request

When I think of you, it brings the night
Because
Blackbirds gather under my skin,
Millions of them,
Each feather a craving, unstill and restless until
Your touch calls them and they
Black the sky
With their dark joy.

When I think of you, it brings the fire
Because
Small suns gather under my skin,
Millions of them,
Each the lit center of a swirling want, until
Your kiss frees them and they
Bright the sky
With their full desire.

When I think of you,
It is shadow and light--
It is everything--
It is all that one who loves you can (gladly) endure.
_____ 

31 comments:

Cloudia said...

where did you get that Shay-ish photo?


"All the ships at sea" will be a photo icon like 'Times Sq Kiss'


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Cloudia said...

amazing fire-ceremony shot. . . I mean really!

Brian Miller said...

oo la la now that is some kinda love...

HermanTurnip said...

Great piece! Here's hoping that she didn't get too close to that fire...

TALON said...

"dark joy" - just love it! Loved the whole poem, but that phrase slayed me.

Susie Clevenger said...

So beautiful and sensual. I love photo too. It works perfectly with your words.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I just love the juxtaposition of shadow and light in the metaphoric language: that first stanza is perfection.

Susannah said...

Beautiful and brilliant.

I loved "black the sky with their dark joy" and "Each feather a craving"

Wonderful writing. x

Lynn said...

Yes - dark joy. Very cool.

Sioux said...

"...each the lit center of a swirling want" is a beautiful phrase.

Also, the use of parenthesis in the last line--that was a brilliant choice.

Daryl Edelstein said...

When I think of you I feel the awe I get when I read your words

Marion said...

Awesome, sensual write, Shay. xo

Mama Zen said...

This is so beautiful you just want to hold it and turn it in the light. Truly spectacular, Shay.

Marian said...

something like ecstasy, so far as i can tell.

hedgewitch said...

No one writes love poems like you, Shay. May you always find the shadow and the light under your skin, and show it to us so perfectly.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I can feel both crows and suns under the skin........Like Joy says, no one writes love poems like you do.

Lolamouse said...

Gorgeous! I love the photo too!

T. A. Smith said...

Well structured creating a unifying but contrasting imagery. I particularly like the simplified conclusion. Beautifully paired with the image.

Yousei Hime
http://tasmith1122.wordpress.com

Louise said...

Wow..very intense & sensuous. The imagery & metaphor is fantastic. Loved it!

Brian Miller said...

already been here but could not resist another dip when i saw your name on the list at dverse...always great to see you shay...smiles.

Steve E said...

Long time since I've commented here, Shay. NOW I know why! Ran out of words to express how GOOD I think you are. I'll stop 'trying so hard', and just say you are Mistress of Love in thought, word, and deed--my opinion.

And that image! WOW! HOT! (And the fire also--grin!)

PEACE!
Steve E

manicddaily said...

Lovely electricity.

Laurie Kolp said...

Hot and sensuous.

skyraft said...

That's pretty great right there.

The blackbird imagery. So well written, so vivid. So much there to love.

Excellent poetry.

Shawna said...

This is AWESOME:
"blackbirds gather under my skin,
Millions of them,
Each feather a craving"

Shawna said...

P.S. My new poetry blog is:

rosemarymint.wordpress.com

myheartslovesongs said...

hot damn! damn hot!

Margaret said...

Hmm. This is what I need to read after a day of cooking and cleaning! And now my man just needs to get home from work... :)

Helen said...

Awesome ... leaving me at a loss for words. And a tad envious of the person on the receiving end of those thoughts.

Sheila Moore said...

hot! second stanza is my favorite.

Shashi S said...

Because black birds gather under my skin... what a way to put it. I loved your thoughts on missing... sensuous and evocative ...

Thanks for sharing...

Wish you have a great new year ahead.... May you find peace, love and prosperity this year ...

Shashi
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