Reanimated Lavender Granola Switchblade Nun rides again.

Wednesday, January 29, 2014

The School For Brevity

meets only on monday.

masters stern as a disease
cut you dead off at the knees.

come be silent, locked away
before you half begin to say.

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138 characters for Words Count 

26 comments:

  1. Sounds like just about any day in my classroom.

    ;-)

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  2. You manage to cut to the quick even in 140 characters. Personally, I think brevity sucks--but that just could be that it takes me twenty words to say what one could. Really well done response, Shay.

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  3. I knew these masters, they could be evil

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  4. Ha ha, love the comment about haiku - you just barely escaped that fate!

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  5. it's haiku. face it - technology conspires against magic, and twitter subsumes japanese form. resistance is futile. :) ~

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  6. Sounds like those teachers that almost turned me from a lefty to a righty.

    Didn't stick though.

    And yes this is very haikuesque for you FB

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  7. You most clearly do not appreciate this particular school! Message aptly delivered! :-)

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  8. You sound perfect, no matter how many words they let you use. <3

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  9. Sounds like my time in elementary school with nuns as teachers. That said I do think brevity has its usefulness. I like your tone, let's us know how you feel. :)

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  10. But you didn't need any more words - this is sharp and to the point and so well done!

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  11. stern as a disease paints a grim picture... brevity is hard.

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  12. Short and to the point. If said in a cadence it sounds like something a girl would recite while skipping rope. Nice!

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  13. ... like Other Mary says ~~ pencil point sharp! Ouch.

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  14. Defiance rings loud and clear here!

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  15. Love it! You certainly got your point across. :)

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  16. What Lolamouse said! But, I thought we met on Wednesdays . . .

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  17. As others have said! This poem does not feel limited in any way, due to the word count limit. Great job!

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  18. This is wonderful! The photo and poem match perfectly.

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  19. I see a movie scene in my head! The poem so matches the view~ Nicely done

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  20. LOL
    I remember oldtime schools where silence was insisted upon, loudly.
    Luv, K

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