"Hush,"
she said,
with her finger to my lips.
"Shhh,"
she said,
her hands finding skin.
Didn't she understand
that I am not,
never was,
never will be,
any kind of beautiful?
"Not a word,"
she said,
as lips followed hands.
"You don't have to--"
"Maybe I want to."
and finally, I realized that she meant it,
there in the
quiet,
together in the
hush.
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for Words Count with the gorgeous Mama Zen, at Real Toads. She asks for the stuff that is difficult to write, in 75 words or less. This poem has 65.
not a word!!!!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful when life happens JUST like that!
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely wonderful. But the narrator should know, she has the kind of beauty people value - it shines all over her.
ReplyDeleteand so the future.is written - wonderful
ReplyDeleteThat is.........beautiful...........
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Oh, but she can see the beauty.
ReplyDeleteWould it be wrong of me to say that this did not seem hard at all for you to write?
ReplyDeleteThis is a new favourite for me.
Nicely penned!
ReplyDeleteOthers bringing gifts, one of the wonders of this world, stitching us back together, even if later they rip us apart. But some things can never be taken away from--this is one.
ReplyDeleteWell, if this is what you put out there when you do that which is not your norm, you ought to do it every day. Of course, I'd still want to see the powerful pieces you prefer to write, too. So c'mon Shay, do it all!!
ReplyDeleteThis truly is beautiful.
ReplyDeleteYou can capture a moment in 65 words better than almost anyone. I loved the wonder and joy of this one. The last words..."there in the quiet, together in the hush." That's a hug in words:~)
ReplyDeleteYou've got me rollin' ... http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/16/shay-made-me-do-it-or-quitcherbitchin/
ReplyDeleteoh, hush now, almost like a lullaby, yet not. sssshhhhhh.
ReplyDeleteWhew. You're really leaving me speechless today.
ReplyDeleteI can't believe the cruel forces of the universe are making you work. This is clearly your calling.
Wonderfully understated. Terrific. k.
ReplyDeleteYes. It's the understated beauty of this that gets to me, too.
ReplyDeleteDitto. Soft and open and beautiful to be wanted and wanting so.
ReplyDeleteYou have captured a very special moment so perfectly...
ReplyDeleteI've got to say that I agree with, Kerry.
ReplyDeleteThe dialogue is in perfect balance...I'm there.
Wowsers.
:)!
There is a soft beauty to this that flutters the heart.
ReplyDeleteThe others have said it already, so I'll just nod my head! Lovely, tender,perfect!
ReplyDelete... we all know how beautiful you are!! It shines through in everything you write.
ReplyDeleteIt is the beauty of the eye, the words that cascade from your soul-that is the true beauty!
ReplyDeleteI agree, you didn't have a hard time writing this... ;D
I think this was my Friday night....
ReplyDeleteWell done in creating a piece with so much gravity in so little words (but we both know you could do it).
viva la
beauty is always in the eye of the beholder {thank heavens!} and it is not only skin deep {thank the goddess!} and all those other good old cliches that became cliches because they are, ultimately, true.
ReplyDeletei love the progression in this!!!
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beauty is always in the eye of the beholder {thank heavens!} and it is not only skin deep {thank the goddess!} and all those other good old cliches that became cliches because they are, ultimately, true.
ReplyDeletei love the progression in this!!!
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This, and you, are beautiful!
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