Wednesday, September 15, 2010

Proverb

    
     for Belle

In the garden,

There is a basin

On its pedestal

For the birds.



When the days turn sharp,

And it rains,

Red and yellow leaves collect there,

Making a strange dark tea.



The sight of it makes me remember you

And the time when no less wicked touch would do.



It makes no difference whether you deserved the love I gave you--

It was thrilling, and that is enough;

Because, my dear,

It's like you always told me:

A bird in dirty water

Sings just as beautifully.

________

For One Shot Wednesday

30 comments:

Cloudia said...

You are the lovely singing bird, Shay

(ah, I remember that tea, those leaves, that chill...and miss them)


TOO Warm Aloha from Honolulu

Comfort Spiral

Titanium said...

Those last two lines are so powerful... what a proverb, Shay! This is succinct and cohesive, scattering fallen leaves all around.

Brian Miller said...

and sometimes dirty is not a bad thing at all...smiles. nice shay! like how you begin and end in that bath...

mac said...

Sometimes, a dirty bird can sing even more beautifully ;-)

signed...bkm said...

Now Shay my dear...that is a most beautiful proverb....keep singing...bkm

Caty said...

this was marvelous...especially the last two lines :)

Scarlet Ily said...

Wow! Bring on the dirty swamp water! This is wonderful, Shay.

willow said...

Wonderful piece, Shay. I have two of those basins just about to brew some strange dark tea.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I agree with Cloudia - you are the lovely singing bird.

razzamadazzle said...

This is wonderful. I must say, I truly love the ending. So glad you shared this.

Teresa

Holland said...

Yes a dirty bird sings just as beautifully... perhaps even more so.

TALON said...

I had to giggle (which might seem inappropriate) because my Mom uses "dirty bird" when someone does something uncouth.

I love the leaf tea bringing a person to mind...

As always, Shay, I completely enjoyed :)

Shashi said...

Worth my love and then moved on to say, a bird in dirty water sings as beautifully.. liked it so much...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya.

Kay said...

haha.. i don't know if it possible, but this sings straight to my heart it sounds like:

'this is one of my favorites, but wait! would I be cheating on all the others??? read it again! do it again! see what happens...'

I know, I know.... a bit out of tune, but I hear that's how you like it ;)

Riot Kitty said...

Sweet.

ninotaziz said...

Time to listen to the birds in the garden.

Lydia said...

Gorgeous poem!

Eric Alder said...

This one's for the birds - LOL!

I really liked the line about the 'strange dark tea' from the decaying leaves in the basin. I've often thought murky water looked like tea.

(And sometimes my tea looks like murky water)

Cheryl said...

Beautiful nostalgic piece.

Daryl said...

I think that might deserve a pillow or a t-shirt!

Marion said...

Beautiful word picture, Shay!! Blessings!

Lynn said...

Lovely words and I love those last two lines...

Mama Zen said...

This has to be one of my favorites.

Jingle said...

well played.

dustus said...

Beautiful poetry, Shay. Always love when irony sings an inspired song of understanding poetic muse. You rock!

Beachanny said...

Found this wry, clever, ironic. Tender start to a tart ending. Enjoyed it very much. Thank you.
Gay (@beachanny)

moondustwriter said...

The music is always beautiful - each instrument has it's own song

Oh Shay you always hit the right chord

moon smiles

Collective Epiphanies said...

Ah this is certainly beautiful. I especially love the imagery you've created of "Red and yellow leaves collect there,
Making a strange dark tea."

The title is befitting, it provides a connection to the last two lines wonderfully. A great one shot :)

Thanks for stopping by and commenting on mine. Appreciate it.

Pete Marshall said...

a bird in dirty water...sings just as beautifully...i think that will become my new favourite proverb....

this was a great poem that i ma glad i had the opportunity to read...

cheers Pete

Mojo said...

Oooh I love the imagery in this!