Tuesday, March 29, 2011

Michigan Love Story



You are cold, I said,

But so beautiful that the darkness hovers near you with all of her stars--

Returning always, helpless with desire.



I am a rocky shore, you said.

Receive me, moon-drawn and rhythmic like a pulse--

I will turn your certainties to sand.



If I am a rocky shore, I said,

Then I offer you surrender smooth as an angel's thigh--

Marbled with devotion and hopelessness.



Come, you said, kiss me for the high,

A little less each time--

Until, finally, I close over you and take you into my blue, barely-beating depths

To be un-born,

Forever,

As my lover.

__________

for One Shot Wednesday

35 comments:

ileana said...

Passionate...I love it!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

HOL-EE COW!!!!! Your love poems just SLAY me. "surrender smooth as an angel's thigh". Oh my God. And "marbled with devotion and hopelessness."

Fantastic!!!!!!!!

hedgewitch said...

Dark and elegant, and the metaphor of emotional depths and dark water, the images of surrender and fading warmth, drowning and loss, play out perfectly in this cold, rhythmic "moon drawn' embrace "...a little less each time..." Cold in every way. Fine writing, Shay.

T said...

Beautiful writing, as always with passion!

Love and hugs!

Don't Want A Real Job said...

I love the use of color, dark but vibrant with your choice of words. Nice.

Sioux said...

I love the idea of surrendering/succumbing at the end...also, you had certainties turn to sand. It would be more predictable/obvious to have one's UNcertainties turn to sand, but you gave us the unexpected. Bravo!

Cloudia said...

unborn....forever...




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Sherry Blue Sky said...

p.s. I LOVE the title!!!! Sigh. Such a hopeless romantic. Hopeless being the operative word, in my case, hee hee! Shay - you write the socks off anyone!

Brian Miller said...

i have unfurled the sails and will smash myself upon that rocks...just to taste passion like that...nice write shay...

Diana Lee said...

Gorgeous, full and warm. A passionate treat.

flaubert said...

"To be un-born,
Forever,
As my lover."
Now, that says something about becoming someone's lover, Shay.
Gorgeous piece.

Pamela

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

"But so beautiful that the darkness hovers near you with all of her stars--

Returning always, helpless with desire."

I could read that a hundred times and not tire of it. Gorgeous.

mac said...

This is so sexy, Shay!

Thank you :-)

KB said...

Love this passionate piece.

Andy said...

A very beautiful piece.

signed...bkm said...

Beautifully passionate writing Shay..unborn forever....great...bkm

HermanTurnip said...

I'm continually impressed with your work. It's far and above my most recent work entitled "I Found Jesus In The Dairy Section". You may think I'm joking, but you'd be surprised ;-)

Pete said...

amazing post

Ami Mattison said...

Ah, cold indeed! That lover is frosty and dangerous, squandering the "I" into dust. And the hopelessly devoted "I" surely should run like hell. But I suppose she won't. Nope, she'll stick around for the soul-sucking kisses like the rest of us. ;) Love it!

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

As a life-long Michigander, I found this particular piece quite poignant, Shay. Very nice!

Lynn said...

Yes - definitely passionate.

Aquarius63 said...

Beautiful writing Shay.

Anita.

Daryl said...

forever ... deep sigh

Kim Nelson said...

...to be unborn forever...
Totally new take, here, Shay. That's what it's about!

ellen abbott said...

slipping silently beneath.

Raven said...

Wow! Wow! Wow! That's all I can say. Wow! Fantastic. Ok, and I can say that too. And these other words. Great poem!

Gabriella Moonlight said...

As always passionate and sultry...

xo Gab

blueoran said...

Who would not repeck yer poetic naychur? You write like a swoon of a dream on a beach on the moon rising from the deepest of love's seas. Dunno how else to say it. You did it all. If you can love half as well as your words for it, lucky, lucky is the world. The pic is perfect, too.- Brendan

Joanna Jenkins said...

Whoa! Incredible-- From the title to the very last word.
Thank you, jj

Joanne said...

A sensuous delight, as my husband would say. Always look forward to your creations. Today, we are one with the stones...

Tess Kincaid said...

More delicious than rocky road.

Sara said...

I love how you put words together. These lines were favorites,

"I am a rocky shore, you said.
Receive me, moon-drawn and rhythmic like a pulse--
I will turn your certainties to sand."

I really liked the last line. The idea of certainties becoming sand.

Lolamouse said...

Another sensual, heady delight! Are your grocery lists lyrical wonders?

Mama Zen said...

"I am a rocky shore, you said.
Receive me, moon-drawn and rhythmic like a pulse--
I will turn your certainties to sand."

That is exquisite, Shay.

Helen said...

Hard for me to think of Michigan in quite the same way ..