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Tuesday, April 1, 2014

Girl

She's not a nice girl.
Her kiss takes your breath,
and while you're weak,
she'll take the rest.

She'll have your child,
but bear it dead--
then raise it up
(but just the head.)

Kiss me

instead.
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for Words Count at Real Toads. 37 words on the nose. 
 

21 comments:

  1. The italicized "me" added to this perfect piece.

    This early in the morning and you produce THIS? Yikes! I've got to put on some foundation (which I don't have) to color my (now) green face... ;)

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  2. The ease with which you've worked in
    hexatonic goatameter is laudable. I've always found the double inverse Ventetian sonnet a little too punctilious, but you've won me over! I applaud yourvsharp observations about universal health care in alternate universes and your adept mingling of iconic images from religion and string theory. Sheer perfection, Shay!

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  3. I've met that girl--I think my son married her once. Whilst I am still laughing from Lolamouse's comment, I do also still feel the sinister, the sense of evil that some people carry behind a front of beauty and smiles. Short, not sweet, but smart.

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  4. ahahah love the rhythm! You'll get all the kisses, definitely. :)

    Here's mine:

    Kiss.

    <3

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  5. This is the most flawless execution of goatameter it has ever been my privilege to read.

    I adore this and give it 5 kisses!

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  6. deliciously dark, just the way I like it.

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  7. Oh my goodness, between your poem and lolamouse's comment, I am completely intimidated! Brilliant!

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  8. Wow! Not nice at all! Snappy, sharp little piece here.

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  9. Rich and inviting details leading us into the dark-and then surprise-so fun to read!

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  10. Yikes, what a scary broad!

    Hope Bosco is doing better this week.

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  12. Oh, Jim, there are bad girls!! (Lolamouse is on fire, I can't compete).

    Let's hope this was a fib, as the other girl sounds too sinister to even consider in the first place!

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  13. Beware the kiss
    From a sultry Miss
    And if you're young
    She'll steal your tongue!!!

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  14. Lolamouse is of course correct, though what Catblossom thinks of a mouse in her lair, I can only wince.

    As at this girl. Wince. ~

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