Thursday, December 2, 2010

Snakes In The Snow

There are doves in the rocks--
In my walls they are sealed--
The whole house may lift away and wheel.

There are snakes in the snow,
Torpid and dull--
"How soft and thin are suede boots and skin."

Late last night and the night before,
Little robbers at my door...

I am Dorothy,
I am Eve--
Afraid to stay--
Afraid to leave.
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for magpie 43

26 comments:

ellen abbott said...

If I was there and I was that way, I would love you.

Lynn said...

That has such a ghostly feel. I'd be afraid to stay or leave, too.

hedgewitch said...

Moody and eerie, with the measured allegoric opening stanzas followed by the dark and twisty refrain-echo of the Tommyknockers/robbers allusion (probably one of the scariest folk tales/Stephen King books ever)fitting in perfectly.

Once again you make the normal just a mask for something else and the emotional trials by fire and dilemmas of life archetypical and haunting.

Tess Kincaid said...

Wonderful. I read this one out loud. Twice.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

SO powerful and haunting....afraid to stay and afraid to leave. Fantastic writing!

Daryl said...

Powerful indeed... but also very fragile

La Belette Rouge said...

As one of my favorite poems EVER is D.H. Lawrence's snake, I ADORE this one. LOVE it. And I hate snakes so that is really saying something.
Beautiful and sad and fish out of waterfully wonderful.
xoxo
Weasel-friend

Helen said...

The last stanza blew me away!!!

Kristen Haskell said...

I also prefer to read aloud. The mystery of the doves and the snakes, a conundrum, yet very satisfying.

Tumblewords: said...

You are wise not to go. And wise not to stay. :) A haunting piece!

LulĂș said...

Little robbers should be shot. I love the last verse because sometimes I am Dorothy and more times than not I am Eve.

Caty said...

the whole thing captivates, but the last stanza was my favorite :)

Brian Miller said...

tight...love that last stanza as well...rolls right off the tongue...

TALON said...

The rhyme (which is awesome) plays off the words brilliantly.

razzamadazzle said...

I agree that last stanza is just awesome! I love the snakes in the snow. Heck--I just love the whole poem!

Teresa

Tabitha Bird said...

YOu just get better and better. Gosh I love your words.

mac said...

Wonderful :-)


However, you could anchor that house down, take the wheels off the trailer and stay a while ;-)

Cloudia said...

Simple


yet. . .


much more.


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Suz said...

What a tasty treat this morning
wonderfully written
doves and snake...eve and dorothy...oh my delightful

Jinksy said...

Go or stay, always a dilemma...

Mama Zen said...

The image of snakes in the snow is so gut level wrong that it's like a slap in the face. Very cool.

Everyday Goddess said...

you're good. very.

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

My god girl...butter drips off of that last stanza

Lydia said...

Yup, that last stanza did it for me too. Dorothy and Eve in one thought, now that is unique!

Jhon Baker said...

Inspired, truly.

Carrie Burtt said...

A wonderful and captivating read Shay....as always...i LOVE it!!!
:-)