Reanimated Lavender Granola Switchblade Nun rides again.

Thursday, December 2, 2010

Snakes In The Snow

There are doves in the rocks--
In my walls they are sealed--
The whole house may lift away and wheel.

There are snakes in the snow,
Torpid and dull--
"How soft and thin are suede boots and skin."

Late last night and the night before,
Little robbers at my door...

I am Dorothy,
I am Eve--
Afraid to stay--
Afraid to leave.
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for magpie 43

26 comments:

  1. If I was there and I was that way, I would love you.

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  2. That has such a ghostly feel. I'd be afraid to stay or leave, too.

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  3. Moody and eerie, with the measured allegoric opening stanzas followed by the dark and twisty refrain-echo of the Tommyknockers/robbers allusion (probably one of the scariest folk tales/Stephen King books ever)fitting in perfectly.

    Once again you make the normal just a mask for something else and the emotional trials by fire and dilemmas of life archetypical and haunting.

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  4. Wonderful. I read this one out loud. Twice.

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  5. SO powerful and haunting....afraid to stay and afraid to leave. Fantastic writing!

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  6. Powerful indeed... but also very fragile

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  7. As one of my favorite poems EVER is D.H. Lawrence's snake, I ADORE this one. LOVE it. And I hate snakes so that is really saying something.
    Beautiful and sad and fish out of waterfully wonderful.
    xoxo
    Weasel-friend

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  8. The last stanza blew me away!!!

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  9. I also prefer to read aloud. The mystery of the doves and the snakes, a conundrum, yet very satisfying.

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  10. You are wise not to go. And wise not to stay. :) A haunting piece!

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  11. Little robbers should be shot. I love the last verse because sometimes I am Dorothy and more times than not I am Eve.

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  12. the whole thing captivates, but the last stanza was my favorite :)

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  13. tight...love that last stanza as well...rolls right off the tongue...

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  14. The rhyme (which is awesome) plays off the words brilliantly.

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  15. I agree that last stanza is just awesome! I love the snakes in the snow. Heck--I just love the whole poem!

    Teresa

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  16. YOu just get better and better. Gosh I love your words.

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  17. Wonderful :-)


    However, you could anchor that house down, take the wheels off the trailer and stay a while ;-)

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  18. Simple


    yet. . .


    much more.


    Aloha from Waikiki

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  19. What a tasty treat this morning
    wonderfully written
    doves and snake...eve and dorothy...oh my delightful

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  20. The image of snakes in the snow is so gut level wrong that it's like a slap in the face. Very cool.

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  21. My god girl...butter drips off of that last stanza

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  22. Yup, that last stanza did it for me too. Dorothy and Eve in one thought, now that is unique!

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  23. A wonderful and captivating read Shay....as always...i LOVE it!!!
    :-)

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