I dreamed that I was drunk and 23--
You were there with me,
Wearing old jeans and a ponytail.
We had wrecked the fucking car--
Driven it into a tree, far down a side road.
You had said, "Trust me, my plans never fail."
We walked away
As the forest went up;
Your smooth tanned arms glowed with red and yellow
And I had no idea what to say.
You turned around, lazy and high,
And I
Stumbled into your sure embrace.
I was bleeding.
You said, "Aw, sugar," in a voice both sweet and mocking,
And tenderly kissed my face.
The woods were on fire,
All we had left was whiskey,
And I knew my love was hopeless, and that I'd never see you again.
It burned, you know.
All of it.
It burned going down.
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done in response to prompt magpie 23


30 comments:
This is a truly gorgeous piece, Shay.
Yes, a good drink does burn going down.
Oh Shay, that was stunning! Great job.
I'm back from vacation and off to catch up on your posts.
Cheers,
jj
Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant. Write on, girl!!
Holey moley- great images...keep on writing!
What a fantastic Magpie, Shay.
You breath such life into your poetry.
Raw, deep, emotional and so well written.
The fires of attraction and liqour - both demand hang-overs! A great piece of writing!
Wow - beautifully written!
what was it I said yesterday? I meant that today.
Raw. Riveting. Rapturous.
:)
Wow! You set the forest on fire with that one..need more than an extinguisher....Great piece...bkm
Wow, this one was truly heavy duty but I loved the bittersweetness of it, I get that and have those in my life and out of my life I still have those bittersweet feelings all over the place!!!!
xoxoxox G
"The woods were on fire
All we had was whiskey."
Been there, done that. It burns.
a splendid piece
wonderful images
so well written it makes one gasp
powerful words and images
Ah, but what a silhouette...
All the different levels of heat you have represented in your piece, this is truly an amazing Magpie! :-)
Truly splendid story, Shay!
Wow, really love your poetry here, really strong voice, great images, relatable...everything we need in poetry today!
Brilliant, simply brilliant!
This is my fave so far. It's manner and images captivated me. My fave kind of writing.....!
Raw and spellbinding piece - a perfect Magpie!
Dear Fireblossom,
Sorry you could not log on to my comment box - and thank you for the lovely thought. What a world the Magpie is.
yes... yes it does/did...
a burning sensation we love to hate....
absolutely great!
It burns of awesomeness, and reeks of chill and dark!!
So vivid and bold is the imagery, that there is nothing left for me to imagine here!
Just plain terrific!
great magpie!
excellent take,
I am in instantly with the power of your words.
This is the third oldie I've read, and I'm ready to just go hide for the rest of the afternoon now, after breaking all my pens and tossing my keyboard out the window. Last lines here rule.
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