Thursday, July 15, 2010

Fire

I dreamed that I was drunk and 23--

You were there with me,

Wearing old jeans and a ponytail.



We had wrecked the fucking car--

Driven it into a tree, far down a side road.

You had said, "Trust me, my plans never fail."



We walked away

As the forest went up;

Your smooth tanned arms glowed with red and yellow

And I had no idea what to say.



You turned around, lazy and high,

And I

Stumbled into your sure embrace.

I was bleeding.

You said, "Aw, sugar," in a voice both sweet and mocking,

And tenderly kissed my face.



The woods were on fire,

All we had left was whiskey,

And I knew my love was hopeless, and that I'd never see you again.

It burned, you know.

All of it.

It burned going down.

_________

done in response to prompt  magpie 23

30 comments:

Mama Zen said...

This is a truly gorgeous piece, Shay.

mac said...

Yes, a good drink does burn going down.

Joanna Jenkins said...

Oh Shay, that was stunning! Great job.

I'm back from vacation and off to catch up on your posts.

Cheers,
jj

willow said...

Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant. Write on, girl!!

kathew said...

Holey moley- great images...keep on writing!

TALON said...

What a fantastic Magpie, Shay.

You breath such life into your poetry.

Helen said...

Raw, deep, emotional and so well written.

Greyscale Territory said...

The fires of attraction and liqour - both demand hang-overs! A great piece of writing!

Lynn said...

Wow - beautifully written!

ellen abbott said...

what was it I said yesterday? I meant that today.

ninotaziz said...

Raw. Riveting. Rapturous.

Cloudia said...

:)

signed...bkm said...

Wow! You set the forest on fire with that one..need more than an extinguisher....Great piece...bkm

Gabriella Moonlight said...

Wow, this one was truly heavy duty but I loved the bittersweetness of it, I get that and have those in my life and out of my life I still have those bittersweet feelings all over the place!!!!

xoxoxox G

Mojo said...

"The woods were on fire
All we had was whiskey."

Been there, done that. It burns.

Suz said...

a splendid piece
wonderful images
so well written it makes one gasp

kathew said...

powerful words and images

JeffScape said...

Ah, but what a silhouette...

Carrie Burtt said...

All the different levels of heat you have represented in your piece, this is truly an amazing Magpie! :-)

Catalyst said...

Truly splendid story, Shay!

Patience said...

Wow, really love your poetry here, really strong voice, great images, relatable...everything we need in poetry today!

RA said...

Brilliant, simply brilliant!

Lena said...

This is my fave so far. It's manner and images captivated me. My fave kind of writing.....!

Tumblewords: said...

Raw and spellbinding piece - a perfect Magpie!

ninotaziz said...

Dear Fireblossom,

Sorry you could not log on to my comment box - and thank you for the lovely thought. What a world the Magpie is.

Kay said...

yes... yes it does/did...

a burning sensation we love to hate....

absolutely great!

kavisionz said...

It burns of awesomeness, and reeks of chill and dark!!
So vivid and bold is the imagery, that there is nothing left for me to imagine here!
Just plain terrific!

soundoffreedom said...

great magpie!

Jingle said...

excellent take,
I am in instantly with the power of your words.

hedgewitch said...

This is the third oldie I've read, and I'm ready to just go hide for the rest of the afternoon now, after breaking all my pens and tossing my keyboard out the window. Last lines here rule.